So, writing has been sparse this week. However, I had a breakthrough yesterday regarding a protagonist’s background, which played nicely into where I hope the plot and protag are headed. Then I had a sentence pop into my head. And another sentence. They glared at me and vied for attention, so I handed them to a trusted student--shout out to J$!--and trusted colleague--holla, R$!--for a vote. 

Right now, the sentences stand one and one. The ol’ Self-Avowed Geek then had an epiphany, if you will: “Hey, I’ll post the twain on LJ and see who comments.” I’m declaring today, at least, Fun with Feuding Sentences Thursday. 

A touch of background might help.  Imagine a character gone to war--second deployment--and already having had an unusual experience. Oh, maybe rescuing a bean-nighe (banshee) from a curse yet being stalked because, hey, no good deed goes unpunished, right? Now, context having been rendered (slightly, though), here are the sentences:

Sentence 1: . . .After looking at the crow, I walked across the parade ground and saw my shadow was gone.

Sentence 2: . . . The crow hopped off its perch and swooped near. Its shadow passed across mine, then vanished into the coming twilight.

Help ‘em out here. They’re needy, and so’s their writer. 

Votes with or without comments are welcome.

Peace out, homeslices.